Peer Review of Summary-1(By Kayla)

1. What do you like best about your peer's summary? (Why? How might he or she do more of it?) I think Kayla got a really good job. Her content is very clear and logical. I love this part.
2. Is it clear what is being summarized? (i.e. Did your peer list the source, and cite it correctly?) I think it’s very clear. She mentions all points. Her summary is so organized.
3. Is the thesis of the original essay clear in the summary? (If not, write out what you think that thesis is.) Yes, the thesis of the original essay is totally reflected to her summary.
4. If you have read the original source, did you identify the same thesis? (If not, how does it differ?) Yes, I think I can identify the same thesis.
5. Did your peer miss any key points from his or her summary? (If so, what are they?) For her article, she mentioned “Before his plan, he received a telegram telling him his father had passed away, and willed his possessions to his son. He discovered the Bible when he back home with sadness and regret”. I think she has to tell the reader he went back home immediately and then develop the bible.
6. Did your peer include any of his own opinions in his or her summary? (If so, what are they?) No, I think Kayla follows the original article to write the essay.

7. Did your peer include any unimportant details in his or her summary? (If so, what are they?) No, I think every sentence in her summary is the key points.

8. Were any points in the summary lost? (If so, where and how might it be fixed? Why do you think it might be important?) Yes, for her article, she mentioned “Before his plan, he received a telegram telling him his father had passed away, and willed his possessions to his son. He discovered the Bible when he back home with sadness and regret”. In my opinion, I think she should tell us the man go back to check the possession. She mentioned his father willed his possession and then he discovered the Bible. That will be a little bit weird.

Summary2

The story goes that a father punished his three-year-old daughter for wasting a roll wrapping paper. The little girl brought the present to her father in the Christmas morning. He was so angry when he found the box was empty. He yelled at her. The little girl looked up at him and cried. She told him she blew kisses into the box. The man was crushed and begged for her forgiveness. In the end, the man kept the gold box by his bed for years and he would take out a lovely kiss. He will remember the love of his child who had put inside till forever..

Summary 1

A young man had admire a sports car and told his father that he wanted to get one in the graduation day. When the graduation day was coming, his father gave him a, leather-bound Bible. The young man was so angry and disappointed. He stormed out of his home, leaving Bible. After many years, the young man was successful in the business and his family, but he received a telegram telling him his father had died and leaved something with his son. He went back his house and feel so sadness and regret. He found his father’s important papers and saw the “Bible”. He cried and opened the Bible. He developed that his father underlined a verse, Matt 7:11. As he read those words, a car key dropped from the back of the Bible. It had a tag with the dealer’s name and the date is his graduation, and the words “PAID IN FULL”.